Leading on from Orsoncarter's post above - that shot is indeed very beautiful and probably the best in your portfolio. Your main image, on the other hand, surely is a webcam image? It does absolutely nothing for you and makes you look vastly unprofessional.
I think you need to work with some better photographers before you settle on a style. I've posted a link below of photographers based in Hull - hope that helps

Best wishes
~Rin
http://www.net-model.com/Search/PerformPhotographerSearch.asp